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::::::Man and woman enter a room making out as they make their way onto a sofa:::::

Kelly:
Wait there's something underneath me.
::::::pulls out a human finger and throws it on the ground freaked out::::::
Whata hell that's a human finger!

Brian:
What....no no ..this is aaaahhh....pen...yeah

Kelly:
No it's not I can see the blood!

Brian:
No that's just red ink...or something.
:::::begins to kiss her to make her forget:::::

:::Kelly begins to feel something else digging into her back, and pulls out an arm:::::

Kelly:
Ok now I know this a human arm.

Brian:
No.....that's...aaaahhh brush....of some sort

Kelly:
No its not it's a an arm and its missing the finger I found earlier.

Brian:
HHHmmmm..... We'll I guess it is an arm.... weird....

Kelly:
You can't tell me you didn't know about this.

Brian:
Well it's not mine. You act as if it's something unusual.

Kelly:
A little.....yes!

Brian:
Not like I'm the only guy with a human arm in his sofa.

Kelly:
Ok I'm leaving.
::::as Kelly opens the door Brian's roommate Jon walks in:::::

Jon:
Hey what's up guys.
:::waving his armless stump::::

Kelly:
:::screams:::: Your missing your arm shouldn't you call a doctor.

Jon:
No I'm fine. I cut it off for a reason.

Kelly:
oh! Ok!

Jon:
Yeah I got a paper cut earlier today and those things are a pain. So I'm just gonna avoid "that whole thing".

Kelly:
I see what you mean.

Brian:
See I'm not weird.

::::Jon walks over by the table and hits his shin then falls down::::

Jon:
AAAaaa fuck that hurt!

Kelly:
Do you want some ice for that.

Jon:
No it's too late. Get a knife from the kitchen, this leg has to go.

Kelly:
I'm sure it will be ok just put some ice on it.

Jon:
Why do you want to see me suffer!!?

Kelly:
I don't to see you suffer but your not cutting off your leg from a bruise.

::::Jon tries to get up by lifting himself by the table on which was paper and gets another paper cut::::

Jon:
Oh my god not again! Why sweet Jesus why!!!
:::starts crawling to the kitchen::::

Kelly:
Is he always this dramatic?

Brian:
Well he cut off his arm so he's not much for jokes.

:::::Jon tries to open a drawer hurts himself by:::::

Jon:
:::bites lip from pain::: The horrid splinter....oh fuck!

:::falls on the ground and begins to twitch:::::

Kelly:
Ok I'm leaving this is ridiculous.

Brian:
See you later!

:::Brian gets a stick of gum and starts to chew then bites himself on the lip falls on the ground and crawls to the kitchen::::

Brian:
:::muttering::: must cut off lip.

Kelly:
:::rolls eyes:::: don't forget the splinter on the drawer.:::::closes the door::::

:::::hear a scream from Brian:::::

Brian:
Ahhhhh shit......splinter!

Posted by IronPressed on December 30, 2003 with category tags of

7 comments
You had me laughing. Reminiscent of Monty Python a little & SNL. A little fine tuning & this might go long way!!!
   comment by revolution (#132) on December 30, 2003, Rated it 4

I thought it was decent till the roommate showed up. It seemed that you were really setting up a surprise, but it went nowhere after that.
   comment by larrylorre (#103) on December 30, 2003, Rated it 3

Very funny. The thing is, at the ending, it gets a little confusing. Something about a splinter or something? Anyway, good show.
   comment by nose (#120) on December 30, 2003, Rated it 4

Pretty good setup and premise. But the last half is just repeating the same joke. evolve it. escalate or take it somewhere else really bizarre.
   comment by vinny9 (#33) on January 1, 2004, Rated it 3

I agree with Vinny9.
   comment by Bryan (#22) on January 2, 2004, Rated it 3

It's great. I would say that Brian could plead with the girl to stay more. Overall an excellent skit.
   comment by dustin (#1) on January 2, 2004, Rated it 5

Great stuff! But it really seemed more like two skits. I'd tighten the opening, before the roommate shows up. Or lose it altogether.
   comment by TANK (#89) on January 15, 2004, Rated it 4

   

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